The Red Sneaker Writing Coach

Critique Services and Marketing Plans


Note: This is William Bernhardt. I wanted you to know that I’ll be doing this critiquing myself. If I have scheduling issues, I’ll let you know in advance. We'll agree on a delivery date. If you'd like an ongoing relationship rather than a single critique, I can be your writing coach, which gives you access to my input whenever you need it, for editing, critique, or just brainstorming. There are several coaching levels. You can sign up for that and get more details on my Patreon page: https://www.patreon.com/willbern


Manuscript Critique

(Price: $2.50 per page)

(For complete manuscripts or sections—50 pages or more)

Would you benefit from:

  • A manuscript critique from an experienced writer with substantial publishing experience?
  • Specific recommendations on how to make it better?
  • A plan for the next draft and marketing suggestions?


Tired of receiving unexplained rejections or brush-offs from editors and agents? Maybe it’s time to get some serious feedback. Send at least 50 pages (or better yet, a complete manuscript) and you’ll receive 10-20 pages of notes and comments, editing suggestions throught the manuscript (via Track Changes), a complete evaluation of its strengths and weaknesses, and advice on how to make it appeal to major publishers. If this is fiction, you’ll get feedback on structure, character, plot, dialogue, and writing style. If this is nonfiction, you’ll receive feedback on structure, style, clarity, narrative flow, and other relevant subjects. Plus you’ll have the opportunity to ask follow-up questions on specific aspects of the manuscript. 

What Other Writers Have Said About This...

"Just wanted to say how pleased I am with this service. Money well spent! ... I’m sure there are some who would take offense at such a detailed narration of issues within one’s work, but I’m not one of them. I paid for this, and what was returned exceeded my expectations. You bulleted what 150+ agents did not…”

"Critique received. If I assimilate these pointers, they should never need to be made again. There’s a semester’s worth of learning in here!”

Length requirement
You need to send at least 50 consecutive pages of your manuscript. Complete manuscripts are best because they allow me to see the big picture, but if you’re not there yet, send what you have!

Formatting Requirements
Manuscripts should be sent in either Microsoft Word format, and use standard manuscript formatting (Times New Roman 12 pt. font, one-inch margins on all sides, double-spaced throughout, header in the upper right-hand corner of every page).

To submit your manuscript, click here and attach the manuscript to your email.



Marketing Plan

For authors with a book soon to be published

(Price to be agreed upon in advance, depending upon the services requested.)

Interested in having a seasoned publishing professional help you devise and implement the best possible marketing plan for your work? Send a brief description of the book and the publication date in an email.

Click here.


Short Story Critique

(Price: $3.50 per page)

(For complete short stories)

Would you benefit from:

  • Professional feedback on your short story?
  • Detailed comments about your story’s strengths and weaknesses?
  • Advice and assistance on targeting your audience and marketing?


This critique will give you specific, precise feedback and recommendations, commenting on your story's structure, plot, characterization, dialogue, setting, and genre. You will receive a detailed analysis at least five pages in length, with margin notes running throughout the manuscript commenting on various style points and other issues that might arise.

What Other Writers Have Said About This...
"Thank you so much for your comments and guidance on my story. Your assistance is exactly what I was hoping to receive....Your comments were both isntructive and motivating.”

Length requirement
You need to send a complete story of at least 5 consecutive pages.

Formatting Requirements
Manuscripts should be sent in either Microsoft Word format, and should use standard manuscript formatting (Times New Roman 12 pt. font, one-inch margins on all sides, double-spaced throughout, header in the upper right-hand corner of every page).

To submit your manuscript, click here and attach the manuscript to your email.